week#3 100 word challenge
Luise and Bob were going to go to the park to play with their friends. When Luise forgot something upstairs. She went up stairs and on her way down she seemed to be going backwards. Then she started to smell flowers and trees. She looked around she was a at the park she herd a voice "oh"she thought. That must be Bob. She looked behind her and it was a talking pig. "OH MY GLOB" she said. After playing with the talking pig for five hours. She woke up in bed and she had told every one about her adventure but no one believed her. But Bob believed her because it happened to bob too.
Hello Masterpigliv,
ReplyDeleteRemember that the focus of today's lesson was to avoid repeating words in such a short piece of writing e.g. upstairs, park, and pig. Why was Luise going backwards? This seems to be thrown in, and not part of the action of your story. Remember to highlight the prompt. Keep on writing and learning.
Sincerely,
Mrs. Van